"Hot, reeking breath washes over her, but her entire body is coated ice that ripples and spikes across her ribs and on down into her gastric sack." ==> "Hot, reeking breath washes over her, but her entire body is coated in ice that ripples and spikes across her ribs and on down into her gastric sack." (change being ...coated ice that... to ...coated IN ice that...)